The good things
• The description of her characters was good
• Turning point, in her story was the highlight. Example, from the anger mood it change to totally a emotion scene.
The weakness
• Avoid jumping from one situation to another
• Some different explanation on her characters. Example, at the beginning the male character was wearing black jacket at the end he was wearing a blue shirt…
Overall her story is very good.
dialogue practice
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